From: Martin Sevior (msevior@mccubbin.ph.unimelb.edu.au)
Date: Tue May 07 2002 - 21:11:21 EDT
Looks really good Paul.
Lets go with this.
Cheers
Martin
On Tue, 7 May 2002, Paul Rohr wrote:
> At 06:30 PM 5/7/02 +1000, Martin Sevior wrote:
> >This one explicitly mentions the plugins and gives a download link.
>
> I'm with Eric. AbiWord 1.0 is a *major* accomplishment, and deserves to be
> celebrated. The only trick is to word the announcement carefully so that we
> set people's expectations appropriately.
>
> In other words, we want to make sure that people:
>
> - don't miss what's great about it, and
> - don't think it does more than it does.
>
> Martin's latest draft is *really* close to that point already, and I've
> attached a revision which includes a few suggested rewordings and
> enhancements as follows:
>
> title/subhead
> -------------
> - most press releases have a header
> - mine still needs work, though :-(
>
> intro para, first sentence
> --------------------------
> - "May ##, 2002" ... most press releases start with a date
> - "first" is a big deal
> - "global" is also a big deal
> - "award-winning" is, too
> - "Open Source" works better here, cf. "free" in para 5
>
> second para, last sentence
> --------------------------
> - no need to capitalize Word Processor
>
> third para, first sentence
> --------------------------
> - "as-you-type" (is there a better way to say squiggle?)
> - no need to capitalize language
> - use examples to emphasize the breadth and depth of language support?
>
> fourth para
> -----------
> - more positive, less apologetic (hopefully still clear)
> - emphasize efforts of existing volunteers
> - actively try to recruit more volunteers (word this better?)
>
> new subhead before fifth para
> -----------------------------
> - call to action draws more attention
>
> fifth para, first sentence
> --------------------------
> - people are leery of the performance of non-native ports
>
> Paul,
> spin doctor
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